Hey everyone,
the complete story is up now! Enjoy!!
Title:A SIXTEENTH CENTURY TALE Author: Bex Rating: 13+ Genre: R Chapters: 5 Cast: You, four lifers, one friend Teaser: He's far away from home, can he find comfort in a friendly stranger?
The storyline is amazing, I just think you should try to write it better, I mean your English is pretty good but there were a lot of mistakes not spelling mistakes, there were a lot of sentences that didn't made sense :(
After comment above I did a re-read, think something went wrong while scripting, Bex. Check out end of chapter 1, think there's a piece there that's supposed to be elsewhere in the chapter (it's elsewhere on the IBICF-version anyways ;))
Other than that, all sentences made sense to me lol
Good eye Monique, there's a paragraph that seems to have moved, should be half way up. Should i re-script or just get Noa or steffi to fix it when they add the rest?
I'm sure that if you email the girls what needs moving and where it needs moving to, they can simply cut and paste it in the right place when they add the rest ;)
15 comments:
Love it!! cant wait for more!!!!
Oohhh what a kiss that was! Can't wait to see where it leads things!
Great start!! :D I love the kissing scene and the innocence of it!!
I've already left you like 1000 comments I think when I've read it before but has to be said again that I luv luv luv luv luv this <3
The storyline is amazing, I just think you should try to write it better, I mean your English is pretty good but there were a lot of mistakes not spelling mistakes, there were a lot of sentences that didn't made sense :(
After comment above I did a re-read, think something went wrong while scripting, Bex. Check out end of chapter 1, think there's a piece there that's supposed to be elsewhere in the chapter (it's elsewhere on the IBICF-version anyways ;))
Other than that, all sentences made sense to me lol
Thanks Monique I'll have a look now
Good eye Monique, there's a paragraph that seems to have moved, should be half way up. Should i re-script or just get Noa or steffi to fix it when they add the rest?
I'm sure that if you email the girls what needs moving and where it needs moving to, they can simply cut and paste it in the right place when they add the rest ;)
fixed
I love the story, it is very well written, and the description is really good too, helps me a lot to imagine the scenes in my head.
Plus, the emotion is practically pouring from every word! I hope you'll continue this story, I'll be forever waiting for the next chapter love! :D
Lovely story! I loved the feelings it gave me. Always a bonus when I get my man in the end! I love happy endings! :)
Thanks for the comments, dunno about there being anymore to this fic but who knows
Absolutely oved it!!! Very sweet story, keep it up ;) Would love to read more Xx
Oh Bex I LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOVVVVVVVVVVVVEEEEEEEEEEEDDDDDDDDDDDD it. Was real WOW.
thank you for writing it
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